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The maps illustrate how one part of a small town called Springsby can be modernized from now with an accurate development plan.

The maps illustrate how one part of a small town called Springsby can be modernized from now with an accurate development plan.
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Here
is
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are
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possible
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possibly
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show
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to show
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 dramatical changes
overall
 in infrastructure with new business across the total area of
this
 part of the map.
One
 of the substantial
improvement
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improvements
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 will be to have a new Bus Station next to the School,
this
 is a major
enhance
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enhancement
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 for the students. Another significant
enhance
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 is a two Shopping Centre with a
Car
Park
 available to its visitants,
one
 next to
Housing
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the Housing
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 Estate, and
other
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the other
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 across the street, just in front of the first
one
. Increase the number of
Car
 Parks On the
one
 hand, there is a negative change in
into
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the
Park
, a leisure facility is getting decrease its area with a
Car
Park
. But
on the other hand
,
the
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apply
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people will have the facilities to arrive
to
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at
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 the
park
 in their own
car
. The whole area in the map shows an infrastructure more
focus
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focused
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 on business and less residential, affecting the students.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words one, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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