Some people believe that it is the residents that are responsible for the cleaning and tidying the street. While others believe it is the responsibility of the government. Discuss both sides and give your opinions

Owing to the problem
on
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who should responsible
in
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for
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tidying the
street
, while some people argue that it is the
government
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job, others believe that it is the resident's responsibility. In my opinion, there should be a
sharing
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task between the
government
and the residents to do the job. The
government
has an obligation by the law to provide a good place for its people to live, including a clean
street
.
Moreover
,
street
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area
is a public space that should be taken care
by
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of by
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the official. The local authority has a big
budget
, making
a
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street
cleaning
is
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an easy task to do.
For example
, in 2018, the annual local
budget
for public
area
maintenance was about 2 billion
rupiah
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.
This
amount is seen as a stellar
budget
for just keeping the public
area
tidy, making the tidying
is
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an easy and feasible task for the
government
.
Thus
, the
government
should take
the
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responsibility
of
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road
maintenance given its big
budget
.
On the other hand
, the residents
also
have the obligation to take care of the
road
near their
house
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houses
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as it is part of their
area
. People who live by the
road
has
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have
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a big influence
to
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on
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the cleanliness of their nearby
street
. The leaves from the trees at their property might fall into the
street
, making the
road
dirty.
For instance
, in the fall season in the Beverly Hills
area
, a small
road
might be closed because it is blocked by
the
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tons of leaves from the trees inside the residents' houses.
In other words
, even
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though
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tough
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though
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the
street
is a common
area
, the property nearby could influence the tidiness of the
street
. In conclusion,
although
a
street
is a public
area
where
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normally
become
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the
government
's obligation to take care of it, the public
also
should be part of the move.
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