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percentage of population attending cinema in Australia from 1996 to 2000

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The provided table illustrates the percentage of
population
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 attending
cinema
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 in Australia from 1996 to 2000,
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, the detailed data on the average film theatre visits of various
age
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 segments (from 14 to 50) is presented by the line graph. Overall, a glance at the table reveals that no dramatic changes in the figures occurred in the given
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,
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, the percentage of people going to the
cinema
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 in 1997 demonstrated a considerable upward tendency.
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, the indicators of
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 groups active
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cinema
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 had been changing with an enviable frequency within the 4-year time frame, creating some kind of a moderate-size wave with ups and downs for each category. Should
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 be noted that the older the
age
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 group, the less its representatives show interest in the activity. As is observed,
in
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 the beginning of the given
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, the percentage of visits went up by 10%, reaching a plateau of 72% for the following 2 years.
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 a mild drop can be seen in 1999, the value modestly climbed to 72% again in the final
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. Regarding the frequency of attendance, the figure
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peaked at 11.1 in 1997, noticeably sliding to 8.2 in 1999, and
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 bottomed at 8.3 in the
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 year.
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 statistics of individuals in 4
age
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 ranges, who enjoy
this
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 form of entertainment in their spare time.
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 generation, aged 14 to 24, the number of visits kept fluctuating throughout the whole
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, hitting the trough at around 15 and reaching roughly 23 in 1999. The trend is
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 true of the remaining groups. Over 4 years, the
age
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 group of 14 to 24 retained its position
of
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 the segment, which visited
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cinema
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the cinema
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 the most, according to the data, middle-aged individuals from 25 to 35 were almost
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 excited about the activity,
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older
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 generation, especially for human beings above 50, the indicator bottomed at around 10 in 1996, 1998 and 2000, showing its highest in 1999, at only about 16, whereas residents in their 40s to 50s can be considered as the relatively neutral group, with nearly 20 in 1999.
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