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You were recently impressed by a staff member at a supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter: Describe the situation Explain how you were helped State what you are going to do as a result of this good experience Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: To Whom This May Concern,

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to show my extreme satisfaction with the behaviour of your staff Mr John I encountered during my visit to your market on
last
 Sunday. I was holding my
3 month old
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 baby in my arms while desperately looking for some mechanical tool to fix my son’s bicycle, yet I could not seem to find it on the shelves of the tool section. I was extremely distressed
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 when he approached me and asked what is the matter. He immediately helped me find that tool and even left it on the counter for me. That has been a great help. Due to his polite and helpful behaviour, I have decided to write positive reviews on your website and I will
also
 mention his name hoping that he might get some cash reward from your company. Employees like him need words of encouragement for their good manners. Yours faithfully, Miss Noor
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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