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Some people think that planning for the future is a waste of time. They believe that it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Numerous people consider that spending time on
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 plans is not suitable. Even, they think focusing on the present is way critical. Unfortunately, I totally disagree with
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 idea. Because living spontaneously and not having strategies are hard ways to build a healthy and impressive
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.
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, success comes from proper and planned work. When people are young, they are prone to work so much but sustainable success can be supported only by progressive plans.
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, one of my colleagues had been working nonstop until he was diagnosed with major depression
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 burnout. Importantly, he has an unplanned personality and likes living spontaneously.
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 if he had organized himself better, he would not have suffered from
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, being ready for the
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 is a more logical decision.
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, the stock market and the
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's plans have
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many similarities.
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, the stock market is a type of investment
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 needed to do big research at
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present.
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 it is a profitable way to make money, short-term sales will not be beneficial compared to long-term ones. Indeed, every word of it is the same for strategies. Eventually, focusing on short-term results seems to be precious, but the other option is more profitable assessing the whole time period.
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, there is a strict idea about time management.
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 my way of thinking, everybody can understand the importance of planning if they have a chance to see their forthcoming lives.

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task response
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the topic and supports your argument clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear transition words to connect ideas and ensure that the introduction and conclusion clearly outline your position.
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