Some people believe that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Believed by some folks, that rising the least age of drivers is the best way to raise

the streets security

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. I partially agree with

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opinion due to the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, youngsters are careless and thickhead in driving by car and

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motorcycles, due to their thrill-seeking

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and the requirements of their age. They are into risky actions like speeding and drifting while driving on the highways.

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, the policy should increase the

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of drivers, because they

are not be

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able to handle

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harmful situations. The elders are more experienced in driving the vehicle while there will be

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dangerous

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for instance

, whilst an 18 years old boy is driving carelessly on the

roads

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and suddenly, a child jumps in the street to pick up her ball, the youngster might be frightened and get nervous and because of the sudden feelings, unable to control the steering wheel.

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irreparable damage.

On the other hand

, it would be better to secure the roads by decreasing the number of private vehicles. The government can encourage

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folks to rise their usage of public

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transportation

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Moreover

, they have to enhance the quality of buses,

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and

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it is important that the related tickets should have an appropriate price.

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policy, not only will decline the chance of road accidents

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but

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air pollution. As discussed in the above paragraphs, I partially agree with the idea that raising the

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restriction could rise the security of roads and streets in the whole parts of the town.

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0Word repetition
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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people believe that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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