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Some people say that the only reason to learn a foreign language is in order to travel or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Disscuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone #disscuss
The modern world is so interconnected that there should be more reasons than ever to improve our linguistic
shills
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skills
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. Travel and work are certainly two primary reasons to study
languages
, especially English. Other reasons for learning foreign
languages
 may be entirely separate from the desire to actually visit a specific country. To work for a commercial company in a new country does require a new
language
, or two
it
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if
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 you include English as an international business
language
 nowadays. The workers who don't speak a
second
 or international
language
 will definitely miss the opportunities in
the
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developed countries. Cause
not
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 all countries may be interested in specific professions and sometimes these professions are simply not needed.
For example
, being
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an engineer
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 is a promising workplace and
well-paid
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a well-paid
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 salary. Unfortunately,
this
 work is not demanded in uncultivated counties. That being
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 case, most people who
want
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won't
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be
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engineer
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an engineer
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 has to be able to use English so that they could pursue their dream career in the USA,
UK
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or UK
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. Learning
a
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a language
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languages
 has been identified as being beneficial to brain health, especially for older people. Multilingualism has many advantages like developing cognitive
performances
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,
great
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and great
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 memory.
For instance
, doctors have done a lot of research asserting that learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
reduce
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risk
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 of Alzheimer's disease. Communicating with people from different culture develop our knowledge, self-confidence and mental health. In my experience, being
multilingual
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a multilingual
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 person has a lot of benefits for my life. Nowadays every
second
 knows more than one
language
. Learning foreign
languages
not
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 limited and can use everywhere.
This
 knowledge will help
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 to miss the opportunity.
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