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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages. In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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It is hard to deny the advancements
of
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 technology.
This
 is why some
people
 suggest that
vehicles
 will be
driverless
 in the future. I personally think
this
 can have many advantages,
therefore
, it should be considered beneficial. Begin with if cars no longer need drivers
people
 can use their time doing things they like
instead
 of driving.
For example
, they can read a book or watch a movie.
Also
, they can rest while they are
on
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 the car.
Therefore
driverless
vehicles
 help humans use their time better. As a matter of fact, most of the time cars are parked and there is nobody to drive them.
Driverless
 cars provide ways in which more
people
 can use one vehicle.
In addition
 if possible and trucks be programmed to move without a driver they can even be managed to take suits in a way that reduces the traffic.
Furthermore
,
driverless
vehicles
 will have
less
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 accidents because the chance of human error is less.
Consequently
, car drives will be safer. Reduce traffic and
less
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 accidents you make peak and crowded cities a pleasant place to live.
People
 will be more satisfied. In conclusion, the idea of
driverless
vehicles
 is brilliant and because of the advancements in technology, it is not far from imagination. I believe
this
 change benefits many
people
,
therefore
, its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
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