Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the internet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Thanks to
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-notch technological innovations, particularly the Internet,
students
can easily reach much
information
for their self-education at home.
However
, many people take
this
excuse to assume that schools are no longer essential. I partly agree with them.
Students
can find any articles or lectures about any topic they want to discover in many search engines like Google. Typing the
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key word
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, they will see many materials relating to that.
Moreover
, each
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are able to learn the
curricular
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which are suitable for them.
Subsequently
, there are still
lots
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of wrong
information
on the Internet. Without tutors, undergraduates may not differentiate
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source
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of
information
from bad
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.
As a result
,
students
can gain wrong knowledge.
On the other hand
, schools can solve that problem. Learning at
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shools
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is a secure way because the
information
learner gain
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checked by authorities.
Furthermore
, when studying
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, pupils can have a better skill set.
For instance
, they will reach communication
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, conflict resolution skills and so on during their team assignments. To put it briefly, while
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is
resourceful
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of
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information
and
help
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students
to study at home, schools
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still necessary due to the
properly
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knowledge they offer as well as
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to obtain skills.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social development
  • fostering communication
  • personalized guidance
  • immediate feedback
  • replicated
  • structured environments
  • discipline
  • time management skills
  • extracurricular activities
  • nurture talents
  • inculcate
  • sense of community
  • shared learning experiences
  • equal access
  • learning opportunities
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