Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara desert or the Antarctic

There is no doubt that there are a plethora of places around the globe that have extreme conditions
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as
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desert and Antarctica.
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pros and cons of visiting
such
these places by tourists. It Is clear that going to these tough climate
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areas gives an overall view
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our planet and how it has many difficult aspects when it comes to environmental diversity.
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number of population around the world have no clue about the danger that
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other
people
in different countries because ,simply, they Live in
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example, many Regions in Africa or arid and suffer from drought on a daily basis. Another advantage
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exploring different atmospheres could be the help that visitors can provide whether by donation or even by
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the problem more considerable by informing human rights organizations or those who care for
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. Where there is light there is
also
shadow, expenditure that
people
spend on
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might be a waste of money.
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types of trips usually have no entertainment activities.
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people
may have acute health issues.
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could be because of extreme hot or cold or simply due to
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difference between the place where they visit and their home. To reduce the possible later risks regions with abnormal
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should be visited by experts and scientists only to study and analyze data. In conclusion, hard conditions countries should have our attention to study ,
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their issues and possible solutions
however
ordinary
people
should
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away from exploring these places for their own safety. They can donate to help
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the degree of
the
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danger that
people
living in these countries face.
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