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Some say job security is more important than job satisfaction. What is your opinion?

#say #job #security #satisfaction
Job
 security is the most significant thing when we talk about employment in my opinion. There are plenty of facts that confirm and confront
this
. It is totally up to
situation
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the situation
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 which every person
with
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in
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workplace
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the workplace
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 has.
Firstly
, you should choose the character of your future
job
. Does it give your extra resources
as
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such as
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 money, free
time
, insurance etc
.
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 The ability
of
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to
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 analyze is the powerful equipment that you have to use to look forward.
Furthermore
, everyone has a family. Your relatives help you to get higher on the way. Most
of
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apply
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barriers
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the barriers
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 are
pasted
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passed
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 with their role
of
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in
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 your life.
This
 is the key to
clarify
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 the company
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which
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witch
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which
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 you are up to.
Few
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A few
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 simple questions should be named like
place
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a place
the place
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 where you are,
service
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the service
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 of government social structures.
On the other hand
, earning money isn’t the aim of life. The plot of
time
 is needed to erect by yourself. The
job
 is just one of
places
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the places
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 in front of
face
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the face
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. You shell to choose the side of turning.
In addition
,
the
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happiness is
essential
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the essential
an essential
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 filling of progress
during
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over
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the
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time
. If
this
 isn’t right for you, it is the wrong way and you should turn around.
Consequently
, can you think about living
through
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without
this
 company? Maybe
this
 is a period when everything is hanging around you. It is the
time
 to want, don’t you think so? The fact that the
job
 is not
so
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as
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 good enough as we want
don’t
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doesn’t
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 make it less needed for economical structure.
Otherwise
, many
of
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people don’t have any chances to help their relatives with something else.
That is
 the Choice which
stand
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stands
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 in front of everyone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job security
  • job satisfaction
  • financial stability
  • consistent income
  • basic needs
  • future plans
  • personal fulfillment
  • life quality
  • psychological impacts
  • stress
  • burnout
  • lack of motivation
  • job market
  • adaptability
  • continuous learning
  • gig economy
  • trade-off
  • safety net
  • mental well-being
  • priorities
  • life stages
  • young professionals
  • career success
  • nearing retirement
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