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Wild animals have no use in the 21st century and trying to preserve animals now is just a waste of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#animals #st #century #waste #money
There is an old saying "Nature selects, the fittest survives.", for
this
 point, I
am agree
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 with preserve
animals
 is just a waste of
money
. I think it is better to distribute the
money
 to other criteria which
benefits
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human beings
humanbeings
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human beings
.
First
 of all, nowadays
the
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countries all around the world already poured
noumerous
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numerous
money
of
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animals
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 preservation
,
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 but seems very little
effects
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in
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result
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.
For example
, many years after saving the nearly extinct kiwi birds
which
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inhabitating
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inhabiting
inhabitation
 in New Zealand, it looks
the
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 number of kiwi birds
still
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at
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low.
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 on
this
 case, even
spent
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 a lot of
money
of
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animals
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animal
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 preservation, as the
result
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 there is
few
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reflection
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 of good results.
Secondly
, it may
seems
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 more effective if
pouring
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 the
money
on
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 education.If children
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learn
learned
learnd
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learn
 about conservation
,
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 when these young seeds grow up, they will take every action with thinking of
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environment
enviroument
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,
inhence
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enhance
hence
 provide
animals
 have
more
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safer
inhabitions
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inhibitions
 to nutritious their
stepafters
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step after
.
Thirdly
, there are many global
environment
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 issues
should
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 be solved than
preserve
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animals
,
such
 as
global
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the global
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 warming
problem
 is getting
seriously
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that
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 even
brought
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the
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criminal
change
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charge
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, made
extremely
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 flooding,
wild fire
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happened
happen
happend
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happen
,
destroyed
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and destroyed
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 so many places. if we face the
problem
strait
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straight
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 to global warming
problem
 , it could
easing
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 the
animals
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animal's
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 preservation
problem
 as well.
Finally
,Not every
problems
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 can be solved by only
spent
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money
 on urging save, if
human
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humans
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 use
this
money
 more wisely, there will be more effective way could
be improve
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 the bad situation of these
animals
 which need
presevate
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preservative
.
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