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Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world.To what extent is this a positive or negative trend?

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It is no doubt
that is
 important
developing
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 day by day. Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world.
This
 essay will explain several
drawback
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drawbacks
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 and
plethora
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 of advantages of it.
To begin
 with, the main reason why some countries choose to import food is the weather and geographical situation.
For instance
, some foods like nuts need dry and cold weather which is not possible for every country
cultivate
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 them.
Therefore
, there is no way except
them
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 from another piece of nature. If they want to cultivate foods
such
 as lemons, bananas nuts and other foods, they have to use high technology which
is need
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 a lot of money.
As a result
, it is more economical to import them.
However
, as there are two sides to a coin, there are
also
 drawbacks
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 it. Foreign products have become popular
in
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all over the world. But it is dangerous for health. It takes a long time to deliver from one country to another.
Therefore
, they use a variety of preservatives and chemicals
like
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.
For example
,
coloring
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 and flavouring substances are used for preservation, and they can be hazardous and
also
 they have a negative impact
on
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. The health
such
 as concern. In conclusion, some countries sell their foodstuffs to other places
of
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 the world. It is good as well as bad trends. On one side, society can satisfy their taste bad from foreign food products.
However
, consistent use of chemicals
which
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effect
on
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the body.
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