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Band 4.5

Some people like to own place where they live, bot other people like to rent where they live. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #place #bot #rent
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people
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 think they have to buy an
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accommodation
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accommodation
 for themselves,
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though
thought
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, some of them deny
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 believed that they should rent it, in my view,
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duo
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 to fragile economical issues in countries, that's better to buy a home and be
owner
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the owner
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 and don't pay rent to others and real estates monthly and annually etc. Living in a
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that is
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 yours, feeling you
saftey
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safety
, calm and there is no any
concerend
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concerned
, because of it I believed that it can be a good incentive for
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an individual
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individual
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 to buy properties. Experiments in recent decades
shows
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 that
people
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 who are the owner are more happy, on one hand in some countries it's not hard to buy a
place
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although
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,
on
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 the
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others
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 domestic structure in government don't let
people
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to
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own a
place
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 easily. High quality of living
is merely depends
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 on every
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single
signle
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single
 person, some
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 believed that it's better to pay for their comfort, buy whatever
the
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 like and want and the main thing is paying for
leasure
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leisure
pleasure
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activities
activites
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activities
 they like. An extensive experiment shows that
these kind
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 of
people
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 has more easy-going personality and they care about their
goof
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 feeling than pay attention to their
lives
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 concerns.
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example
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 if a person
pay
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 a lot to buy a property and pay the bills and loans,
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prefer
perfer
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prefer
 to
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pend
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 that money to improve the quality of living or
investing
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on
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 their jobs or
some
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apply
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stocks. In my opinion,
buy
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buying
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 a home to live
is
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 better, because you are sure if you lost the job you
doesn't
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 need to pay for rent and there
is
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are
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 no concerns. In conclusion, many
people
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has
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have
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 different personality and
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a verity
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verity
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variety
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 of reasons to buy or not buy a
place
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 all of them decide in their own circumstances.
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