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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change.others however think that change is good.discuss both these views and give your own

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Most humans are in favour of doing different things in their lives. Others
however
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 disagree that prefer to accomplish the same thing all the time. On the one
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the majority of
people
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 prefer to spend their time enjoyable, they really want to change their
life
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 quite often. Since open mind
people
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 think shift develops mental of humanity and prevents
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getting used to the sameness. Due to
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 lifetime of
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, they consider that avoid to
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 lifestyle. For example,
community
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a community
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 who don't like normal
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 like going to work please or
office
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everyday
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. Since it is too mundane for them.
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, they adore travelling and
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 entertainment activities.
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, some
people
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 who afraid to change their
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 methods.Occasionally hide-bound
society
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 don't want to live in alteration. The reason for
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,
they
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 are used to their lifestyle and they have
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difficulty
adaptingto
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adapting to
adapting
 a new way of
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, there would be quite tedious and maybe they get old,
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they
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would regret it. Because human
life
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 will have passed it quickly. To sum
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for
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people
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 need
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variation. Because it is a
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vital role in everyone's
life
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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