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Some people think that machine translation is highly developed in today's society. Therefore it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. What's your opinion?

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I am a general director
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 REBOOT Fitness.
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 is a network of sports studios for interval training. We have 4 studios in Moscow. Our training lasts 50 minutes. On
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training
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 we use
treadmill
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the treadmill
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, step platform and dumbbell. And training is accompanied by music. In each
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studios
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 we have two gyms. One of them for interval group training and one for recovery stretching or TRX. In our company works more than 50 employees. We have 30 trainers, 12 administrators, 6 cleaning staff and 12 office workers. In
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office
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 we have
marketing
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department
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, fitness
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, sales
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 and operations
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. I manage all departments of the company and every day have
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 with other employees.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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