Some people think that machine translation is highly developed in today's society. Therefore it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. What's your opinion?

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is a network of sports studios for interval training. We have 4 studios in Moscow. Our training lasts 50 minutes. On

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we have two gyms. One of them for interval group training and one for recovery stretching or TRX. In our company works more than 50 employees. We have 30 trainers, 12 administrators, 6 cleaning staff and 12 office workers. In

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with other employees.

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Some people think that machine translation is highly developed in today's society. Therefore it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. What's your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

You visit a cafe every day. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter say what you like about the cafe suggest an improvement to the cafe explain the benefits of your suggestion.

Most career choices demand vocational skills or specialist knowledge. However, despite this, most schools still teach academic subjects such as history or social studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this?

With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Face to face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls. Do you agree or disagree ?

With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?