Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people say that working for one company all their life is beneficial, while others argue that it is
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idea to
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for many companies.
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working for the same company gives more
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financially, working at various places gives
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the employee
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employee
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employees
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a better
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experience. Working for a single organisation
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life
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few
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advantages
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might get more health
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and
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will receive a larger amount of gratuity on
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of many years in
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company.
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employee
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the employee
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works for more than 10 years should receive 15
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of their package plus will
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an advance health
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card.
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,
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employee
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employees
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changes
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from one organisation to another will get a chance to
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on many systems and
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helps in gaining more knowledge.
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, learning new technologies will be an advantage to
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paid higher.
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paid because they
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in many skills
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is because they worked in many different
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cultures. To conclude, Working for
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one organisation only have
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benefits
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, When compared with working at many companies gives good experience and high salaries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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