There are many inventions in human history, but some people think that the most important invention is the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is known that multinational
events
that bring together people of different nationalities and cultures include sports, cultural,
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, various types of entertainment and more. One way or another, the World Cup should not be counted
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most unifying element that connects countries and continents. In my opinion, the superlative in graduation is calculated according to the more significant indicators. Giving a personal example I’d like
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that my husband likes to watch soccer, but it
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case when his
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team plays. And God forbid if it loses,
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he may be in a gloomy mood all evening long. In turn, I am interested in music competitions
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as Eurovision and Metropolitan Opera National Council Auditions inasmuch as they are much more spectacular. And yet it seems to me that people
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together not only by grandiose shows.
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, from
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, emotions of solidarity are non-durable. It is worth turning to more fundamental ones
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the ideas of business and the interconnection of companies on the condition of mutual interests is what ensures the standard of living. Even the United Nations has one of the seventy practices
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conducive to business activity. It should be noted that the word "economy" is the most recognizable one on earth. In conclusion, I'd like to emphasize that the
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and motives that consolidate nations can be ranked both from the point of view of the height of emotions
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and from the point of view of usefulness for humanity, durability and strength. And it seems to me that those who are time-tested win.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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