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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion

#city #traffic #congestion
It is commonly discussed that
traffic
 congestion is metropolis cities’ main issue.
This
 essay supports the idea
that is
 caused by that
people
 tend to buy personal vehicles, and that’s why there are more cars on the streets than roads are designed for. It will be analyzed, that to resolve
this
 problem governments should expand
public
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transportation
system
.
People
preferring
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prefer
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 owning a car is
a
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 main reason why the
traffic
 becomes heavy. The increase in the number of vehicles on the streets leads to higher rates of
traffic
 accidents.
For example
, Indonesia is the 4th country with the highest population, based on
the
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statistic, where approximately 300,000
people
 yearly have troubles
get
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 into
traffic
 accidents.
Therefore
, when accidents
occurs
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, cars reduce their speed and
traffic
 becomes even more overloaded.
However
, one proposes solution is that government should increase the number of public transport systems. If government upscale the amount of metro, more
people
 will utilize it.
For instance
,
a
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research study by Harvard University,
traffic
 in China was reduced by 40% after the government upscale the public
transportation
system
.
This
 public
transportation
system
 helps
people
 with alternative ways to commute. In sum, various ways can be taken in order to solve the problem of
traffic
 congestion by developing public
transportation
system
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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