Many people believe that the increased presence of violence in films and television these days in responsible for the rising incidents of violent crimes among youths in society. They argued that government have a duty to control the media so as to reduce this phenomenon. Do you agree with this argument?

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is divided into two genders
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weaknesses
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weaknesses
, drawbacks and advantages. There are several types of requirements which lead to work in specific
jobs
such
as intellect, physical power and mentality. I partly agree with
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statement.
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intellect are more likely to have both genders. In fact, both sexes biologically have almost the same process of working IQ,
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makes reason.
Secondly
, in some spheres
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to have more physical power neither intellect nor mentality.
Jobs
such
as working at mines and as carriers. To reflect the fact that
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tend to be less powerful rather than men.
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, it is known that there can be some mutations in organism
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makes female to be more powerful and men to be less powerful. As an example, It can be seen that people are inclined to change their genders.
In addition
to
this
, there are some
jobs
where it is unsurmountable to not have mental advantages where you are not able to work in that place.
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, lawyers and so on. They must be unflappable because they decide subjective decisions
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can lead to
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people's lives.
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, being patient
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tuitors
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tutors
, teachers, doctors and so on. In order to bring up and
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nurture
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children who can be sometimes
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aggressive
agressive
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aggressive
, laggard and overactive. In conclusion, all factors mentioned above show that we must divide specific works,
however
, at the time it is better to have exceptions as well
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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