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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart compares
people
’s eating habits of
coffee
 and tea in five Australian cities in
last
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 4 weeks. On the whole, in all these five regions, the majority of individuals preferred to go to a café to have
coffee
 or tea, while fewer
people
 enjoyed purchasing fresh
coffee
. In more detail, the percentage of
people
 who went to a café for
coffee
 or tea took the
first
 place in four cities which was around 61% in Sydney, around 63% in Melbourne, 55% in Brisbane, and around 62% in Hobart.
However
, in Adelaide, the same figure of that (around 49%) was less than the proportion of
people
 buying instant
coffee
 (50%). Meanwhile, instant
coffee
 drinkers
also
 made up a relatively higher percentage in the rest of
four
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the four
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 cities which was 45% in Sydney, about 47% in Melbourne, about 53% in Brisbane, and about 54% in Hobart.
Nevertheless
, fewer
people
 chose fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks
especially
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 in Brisbane, Hobart, and Adelaide. Their figures were less than 40%, but these statistics were more than 45% in Sydney and Melbourne.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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