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Some people say that increasing prices of petrol is the best way to reduce traffic jams and pollution. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #prices #petrol #traffic #jams #pollution
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 carbon
emission
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 for
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environment
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the envionment
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envionment
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environment
 was always debatable now has become more controversial. Many people claim that high
prices
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 of
petrol
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 will reduce
traffic
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 and its
pollutions
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 while others reject
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 notion. In my opinion, the latter preposition appears more rational
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in
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. I will elaborate
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 reason and
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 conclusion. There are myriad of reasons which will
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 argument but the most preponderant stems from the fact that
petrol
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 is not only used for personal vehicles. it is
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 used in public
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transportation
transportaion
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transportation
 and other facilities
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. The main problem of
traffic
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jam
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jams
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 and
pollution
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 is
single vehicle
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 usage of vehicles. If
individual
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individuals
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 prefer public transportation it will automatically reduce the
traffic
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 and
pollution
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 content from the
air
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. Another pivotal aspect of
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 trend is that if
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government
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 will increase the
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prices
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price
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 of
petrol
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 it will
starightly
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straightly
 hit poor people who can not manage to travel
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on
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 public transport due to
high
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 raise
of
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petrol
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prices
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 and which will
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 impact
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travel
in
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 public transport. Elaborating my viewpoint, there are more demerits but one
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 the crucial effect
if
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 that
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higher
high
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highe
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higher
 price of
petrol
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 will lead
to
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fluactuate
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fluctuate
 the demand and supply of
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products and food items. Transportation industries
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is highly depend
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 on
the
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petrol
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 if it
raised
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 by
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government
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then
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 every common man.
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, the higher
prices
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government
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 should reduce the consumption of
factories
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factories'
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air
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pollution
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 and charge them for polluting high values of
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poisoned
poisioned
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poisoned
air
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. According to
arguments
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the arguments
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aforementioneed
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aforementioned
 above, one can reach
to
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a
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 conclusion that the drawbacks of reducing
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face
facre
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the facre
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 of
petrol
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 are indeed too high.
Government
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 should come up with other sources to prevent
the
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air
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pollution
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 and
traffic
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 jam.
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