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Some people say that increasing prices of petrol is the best way to reduce traffic jams and pollution. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #prices #petrol #traffic #jams #pollution
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 carbon
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environment
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envionment
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environment
 was always debatable now has become more controversial. Many people claim that high
prices
 of
petrol
 will reduce
traffic
 and its
pollutions
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pollution
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 while others reject
this
 notion. In my opinion, the latter preposition appears more rational
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 reason and
thus
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 conclusion. There are myriad of reasons which will
further
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this
 argument but the most preponderant stems from the fact that
petrol
 is not only used for personal vehicles. it is
also
 used in public
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transportation
transportaion
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transportation
 and other facilities
also
. The main problem of
traffic
jam
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jams
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 and
pollution
 is
single vehicle
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 usage of vehicles. If
individual
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individuals
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 prefer public transportation it will automatically reduce the
traffic
 and
pollution
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air
. Another pivotal aspect of
this
 trend is that if
government
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 will increase the
prices
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 of
petrol
 it will
starightly
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straightly
 hit poor people who can not manage to travel
in
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 public transport due to
high
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 raise
of
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petrol
prices
 and which will
also
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travel
in
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 public transport. Elaborating my viewpoint, there are more demerits but one
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 the crucial effect
if
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 that
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higher
high
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highe
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higher
 price of
petrol
 will lead
to
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fluactuate
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fluctuate
 the demand and supply of
the
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products and food items. Transportation industries
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is highly depend
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 on
the
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petrol
 if it
raised
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 by
government
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then
 automatically
affect
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 every common man.
Beside
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, the higher
prices
government
 should reduce the consumption of
factories
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factories'
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air
pollution
 and charge them for polluting high values of
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poisoned
poisioned
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poisoned
air
. According to
arguments
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aforementioneed
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aforementioned
 above, one can reach
to
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a
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 conclusion that the drawbacks of reducing
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face
facre
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 of
petrol
 are indeed too high.
Government
 should come up with other sources to prevent
the
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air
pollution
 and
traffic
 jam.
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