Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

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societies have paid attention to

people

who choose

science

for education.

Otherwise

, there are countless music and art experts who do not

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in enough

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society. I believe

science

and technology should be more appreciated owing to a number of convincing reasons. The most remarkable reason is that technology and

science

are growing up every

second

and

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the

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life easier. Take medicine which is absolutely necessary as the most essential example; Even

people

have

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who have

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difficult illnesses are capable of living much longer by taking new medicines.

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,

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the real meaning of life, music and art are able to feed

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soul. Scientists and

also

technology experts helped the country to develop, have got

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income.

Thus

, it is logical that parents pay attention to their children's education in

science

more than art. In conclusion, the valuation of

people

followed

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scientific and technological

educating

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is likely to outweigh

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of

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music producers and artists. From my point of view, the more

science

are

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is

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improved in all sorts of societies, the more

people

are able to live in better quality and simpler way.