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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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Physical
punishment
 is a good idea to discipline
children
. It's been applied to make
children
 well-behaved or well-mannered. I strongly agree that giving corporal
punishment
 can produce good outcomes,
thus
 leading to becoming a more successful individual.
Parents
 tend not to give heavy
punishment
 to their
children
 due to their being so protective. They reckon that smacking might encourage the
children
 to be rebellious which could destroy their future. Another reason is just the soft-hearted of having fear of being mistreated when they get old. A good example of
this
 is
parents
 giving physical
punishment
 repetitively within a day even though little mistakes can lead to trauma which could result in
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mental disturbance in a long run. Having existing fear of hurting their
children
 through smacking leads
parents
 to turn blind items which most of the time can cause
children
 to be on the wrong path. Despite giving physical
punishment
 few relevant studies and outcomes based on real-life situations
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give a good and productive outcome. Certain testimonies have been shared with those whose been smacked during their toddler stage, that it helps them to pursue their dress and reach three goals in life. They reflect the punishments the love portrays of their
parents
 to them by guiding them not to indulge in negative activities in life.
This
 essay precisely argued smacking is the best way to discipline
children
. In my point of view, as I ponder those younger years of kine, I strongly believed that physical
punishment
 can provide a brighter future though it involves small and occasional risks.
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