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In many countires, there are an increasing number of private cars. What are the advantages and disadvtanges of this trend?

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In recent years, an immense amount of
cars
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 are in the streets that the vast majority of them use individually. So,
increasing
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number
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the number
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 of private
cars
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 have both benefit and drawback.
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, I believe in, its disadvantages
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 obviously more than its advantages. At the
first
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, nowadays, we see
the
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 large number
private
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of private
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cars
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 in the cities compared to the past which
show
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 families can buy easily
car
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.
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, there are a lot of services which can be obtained by having a
car
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 in each family.
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,
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a family
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family
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families
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 in which there is at least
a
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one
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car
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, probably have easier transportation for family members
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 as kids,
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,
this
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 type of family can have a short road trip
in
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 the weekends. Another point is that there are a lot of different drawbacks
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increasing
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an increasing
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 number of private
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 which has definitely
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 impact on the other aspects of people's life.According to the clear evidence, global warming, increasing
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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 gases and air
pullotion
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pollution
 are just parts of
uncontrol
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the uncontrol
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using
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 of
cars
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 in the
urbans
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urban
.
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, when every family is interested in driving their own
car
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, we mostly have no clean weather in the big cities worldwide. I believe that in order to have
healthy
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 life for ourselves and keep the earth
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 inhabitable for the
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future
futuer
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future
, we
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most
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must
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 avoid modern
lifestyles
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behavior
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behaviour
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such
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 as using
much
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the
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private
cars
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instead
ingested
inested
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instead
 of utilizing public transportation. In conclusion, our world is under the
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 of our
action
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actions
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 and decision
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 as having
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a tendency
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 to drive
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personal
persnonal
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personal
cars
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 in unnesseccery moments.
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, once in a while we should swallow our selfishness and try to make a concerted effect to make a better and
clean
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 world.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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