Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves. Some people think that it is a good thing, while other thinks that it has dis advantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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factories want to be club money supporters because they believed it can improve their revenue by spending cash for them. In front of it, the teams and players can be good influencers for them. In my
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way is enough to introduce themselves and their products or services to the people, due to many experiments and results of other companies I agree with
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kind of advertising. Some clients think it is better to be a sponsor of sports clubs,
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fact that advertising with public figure especially famous players have incredible effects. Probably people buy or use those services just because of the feeling for that player or team.
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a football team's sponsor, the team print
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name on the player's t-shirt, and all the fans buy the player's t-shirt which that brand's name on it, or the spectators see that name and brand every single match, and it can influence them
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. On the other side, some
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strategies are completely different, they think the opposite of the latest group mentioned in the
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paragraph. they believed that spending on sports advertising is not fair enough, it just wastes money and
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extra money to the teams or players, they usually decide to order stop-motion videos to show on social media or print some leaflet and share it on the street. There are some concerns about new ways of advertising and they didn't accept modern ways of it, still living in traditional thinking.
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, some offices don't have a marketer manager to consult them. In my opinion, the
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group is chosen the best way ever, because they know how to work mentally on their consumers.
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