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As well as making money, businesses should also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
It is widely believed that
companies
 should not only generate revenues but should
also
 be responsible for social issues. Personally, I agree with the point of view that enterprises should be honour bound to contribute, which will have positive effects on both
the
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society and the company itself. On the one hand, enterprises have always
inclined
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 towards making profits. I believe that businesses already contribute to
community
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 by only focusing on making incomes. The main reason is that when
companies
 create
surplus
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, they can expand their businesses, which brings more job opportunities to people. Some big cross-border corporations
such
 as Apple or Google can be a great illustration. A survey conducted recently revealed they headhunted thousands of workers all over the world, which helps reduce unemployment rates in many countries.
Additionally
, the more earnings enterprises make, the more taxes they pay to the government. The money raised from
this
 can be used to invest in other important sectors
such
 as health care,
education
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, which will benefit
the
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society as a whole.
On the other hand
, I would argue that apart from making money, businesses should
also
 bear
the
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social responsibilities.
First
, since the rising number of factories these days has led to severe environmental damage,
companies
 need to take the lead to help protect the natural environment.
For instance
, they could introduce new technologies or innovations to recycle their
wastes
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instead
 of disposing
right
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them right
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 away or releasing
into
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 the air.
This
 would contribute to cutting down emissions and
hence
 help to reduce
greenhouse
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 effect. In conclusion, for the reason mentioned above,
although
companies
 should prioritize the need to make money, I believe that they should
also
 have obligation to
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society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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