Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is said that
country
plays an important role in defining people's
culture
, while some others disagree with
this
. I believe that our home
country
is as influential as other factors like living place and
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social media. The
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home country
home-country
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home country
can impact on forming
individuals'
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culture
. Schools are
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responsible
respolsible
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responsible
for
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students about their
culture
and traditions.
For instance
, many educational and fun events
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at schools on specific religious and non-religious days.
In addition
, governments try to preserve their
culture
by broadcasting informative television
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programmes
programs
programms
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programs
.
For example
, in Iran, there is a traditional day which people
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celebrate
it
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by making a fire. The government usually hold fireworks display in parks and some handouts are distributed in order to
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citizens
to
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thair
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traditions. It is undeniable that we are living in the computer age, and most people have an opportunity to gain a large number of information about other
countries
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countries'
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cultures.
In other words
, many young adults tend to look up to
well-
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well-known
knowned
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known
western celebrities by following their pages on social media.
For example
, some Indian teenagers are reluctant to wear their traditional clothes.
In addition
, some immigrants are influenced by the
country
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they live,
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especially
especillay
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especially
their children. In
fact
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their children grow up and
educated
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in
the
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environment which is different from their origin
country
in terms of the language, rules and traditions.
Thus
, it is likely that
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their
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their
culture
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become
becom
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becomes
different from their parents. To sum up, it seems to me that our
culture
can be affected by our living place , home
country
and the social media
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