Many people are opting for several careers as compared to a single career to earn more money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that choosing many professions over
one
is
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beneficial
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benefical
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beneficial
than
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with
one
to earn more and more
money
. To some people switching
job
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jobs
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again and again for
better
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a better
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opportunity
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opportunities
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to gain wealth is justified.
However
,
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like to keep up
with
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single
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professional way.
This
essay totally
agree
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with the idea of going with
one
career
than changing
jobs
frequently, because if we stick with
same
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career
we may master
on
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it
that
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which
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will make us successful .
Moreover
,
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the same
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same
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some
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professional activities make a man confident and may take him at the pick of his
career
as he
dream
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. While changing
jobs
may skills us
on
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many
profession
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professions
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, without making us perfect in
one
skill.
To begin
with, if someone wants to be perfect
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any
work
, he has to be
patience
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for
success
. As there is no mastery
may
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that may
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come overnight and
it
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requires hard
work
, changing
job
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jobs
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may
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affect
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its way of perfection and
success
.
For example
, if a teacher
change
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changes
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his
career
to a customer care
service man
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serviceman
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, he may
initially
can
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make more
money
than he could make as a teacher, but eventually may fail
on
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his new job as he lacked experience.
However
, if he
keep
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us as a teacher and
keep
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keeps
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hard
work
on it to reach his goal, he may end up as a headmaster or a professor or as
a
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head of the department of his
work
.
Furthermore
, he will be confident
one
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on his subject, which will lead him to
success
.
On the other hand
, if people keep switching
jobs
over and over for more
money
, they may make
money
for some time but will not end up
career
successfully
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without reaching
at
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it
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pick. Because changing
career
means starting from the beginning without progress and promotion. To be concluded, considering the points discussed above, the most
retional
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rational
regional
conclusion to be drawn is that, changing
jobs
may not lead us toward
successful
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a successful
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career
and may harm us
on
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in
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making
money
too.
However
, choosing
one
profession over many may help us to reach its pick with satisfaction and
success
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job market dynamics
  • skill diversification
  • technological advancements
  • income potential
  • gig economy
  • flexible opportunities
  • financial necessity
  • economic instability
  • insufficient wages
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • continuous learning
  • development
  • social pressure
  • peer pressure
  • career trajectory
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