Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
According to the prompt, people believe that children should
be encourage
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be encouraged
be encouraging
for
initiative Change preposition
to
work
for community
in their free Add an article
the community
time
as unpaid which can be favourable for teenagers and society
. In
my perspective, I will Change preposition
From
agree
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onagree
toagree
withagree
this
statement by following two reason
that Change to a plural noun
reasons
are
given in below and support the thesis.
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is
First
of all, Add an article
the youngster
a youngster
youngster
should be involved Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
themselves
in social Correct pronoun usage
apply
work
in
unpaid and Change preposition
apply
this
work
will create positive attitudes towards the
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apply
society
. During spare
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their spare
time
, they should be utilizing their time
by supporting the
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apply
society
that can anything such
as encourage
the child for their future goal and giving proper Wrong verb form
encouraging
guide
according to their condition. Replace the word
guidance
for instance
, country
like INDIA, Add an article
a country
huge
amount Add an article
the huge
a huge
the
population Correct article usage
apply
in
poverty and itinerates Add a missing verb
is in
whereas
they can't take Correct word choice
where
education
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an education
from
school, youngsters can contribute by giving tuition classes to poor kids, who not Change preposition
at
affords
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afford
the
education in school.
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an
On the other hand
, most of
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apply
youngster
give free Add an article
the youngster
time
in playing games and others
bad habits. They can utilize Correct quantifier usage
other
time
in good
way Change the article
a good
whereas
they can give leisure Correct word choice
apply
time
for participating as
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in
volunteer's
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volunteer
work
such
as blood donation camp
, promoting education Fix the agreement mistake
camps
work
and others type
of activities, they can gain knowledge from Fix the agreement mistake
other types
the
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apply
society
and get experience. This
work
would be useful for Add an article
the youngster
youngster
Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
for
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in
their
future.
To sum up, unpaid Change the word
the
community
work
will be
Unnecessary verb
apply
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a benefit
benefit
Replace the word
beneficial
for
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apply
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the youngster
a youngster
youngster
, not for their experience but Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
also
contribute
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to contribute
own
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to own
society
and community
grow equally. Hence
, I will support the community
's think that teenagers must get involved in society
Replace the word
social
work
Correct word choice
and work
as
unpaid.Change preposition
apply
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