Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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initiative
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community
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in their free
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as unpaid which can be favourable for teenagers and
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that
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given in below and support the thesis.
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of all,
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the youngster
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should be involved
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in social
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unpaid and
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will create positive attitudes towards
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. During
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time
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, they should be utilizing their
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society
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the child for their future goal and giving proper
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according to their condition.
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like INDIA,
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population
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poverty and itinerates
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they can't take
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from
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school, youngsters can contribute by giving tuition classes to poor kids, who not
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the
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education in school.
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give free
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in playing games and
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bad habits. They can utilize
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way
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they can give leisure
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for participating
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volunteer's
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work
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camps
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, promoting education
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and
others type
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of activities, they can gain knowledge from
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society
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and get experience.
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would be useful for
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the youngster
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for
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their
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future. To sum up, unpaid
community
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work
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benefit
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the youngster
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, not for their experience but
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contribute
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own
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society
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and
community
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grow equally.
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, I will support the
community
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's think that teenagers must get involved in
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society
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work
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and work
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as
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unpaid.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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