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Children should play online games nowadays. Discuss advantages and disadvantages.

#children #games
In the modern world, an increasing number of children spend long hours on
computer
games
. In
this
 regard, people have been continuously arguing about its
merits
 and demerits. Admittedly there are a few key benefits and many risks
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both in
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finally
 express my position, which
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believe that
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 outweigh
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advanages
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advantages
.
Firstly
, there are major two categories of demerits incurred by
kids
 spending
time
 on
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internet
games
. The
first
 category is its negative impact
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 their physical growth process.
For example
, by spending
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 of their
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 on the web, young students will have less
time
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outdoors. It will negatively impact their development of healthy
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physical
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physical
 growth. Their muscles and bones will be weaker.
Furthermore
, too
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 online
games
 give a significant
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 to their eyes as well. The
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 disadvantage is its impact
to
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kids
' relationships
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 others. by focusing too much on internet
games
. Namely,
kids
 will have
less
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 chances to develop interpersonal
skills
.
For instance
, their communication and social
skills
 will be inferior to those who have more
time
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 people face-to-face and
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 with them directly. The
second
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 its
merits
. There is no doubt that there are a few
merits
 for
kids
 to play online. It will provide them to develop their
computer
skills
 which is an important ability for them for the rest of their lives.
Also
, the web provides
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 space for children to connect to
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outer world
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extreme conditions
such
 as the recent
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 pandemic or natural disasters. Regardless of the drawbacks listed above, these
merits
 are not negligible. In conclusion, as discussed above, there are several notable dangers and a few key
merits
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 children's usage of
computer
games
. It has
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 of damaging
kids
' healthy growth physically and socially,
however
, it
also
 can provide chances for them to develop their online
skills
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. I believe the disadvantages outweigh the advantages and adults should carefully monitor
their
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 length of
time
 young students devote to
computer
games
 so that they can keep a good balance in their lives.
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