Write about the following topic: In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

No one should
drinks
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more than one small glass of fruit juice a day Health experts issued the warning
last
week
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after followingdiscovery
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followingdiscovery
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following discovery
that
children
and
teenager
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teenagers
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are consuming 40% more added sugar than recommended, so that fruit juice and fizzy
drinks
are the main culprits
According to
the results of a survey conducted Public Health England (PHE),
such
drinks
are the biggest source of sugar with
children
aged 4 to 18.Cereals and cereal bars were
next
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largest source.Adults derived a lower proportion of their
overall
calorie intake
with
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sugar, but consumption was still too high in all age groups.The experts
recommending
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that adults and
children
limit
himself
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to one 150ml glass a
daydrunk
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day drunk
with a
mealto
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meal to
reduce the risk of tooth decay'Those best
drinks
for school-aged
children
are water and low-fat milk,’told Alison Tedstone,PHE’s chief nutritionist.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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