Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

Parents
throughout the world are
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indulging
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with their offspring to
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participate
in new and fun activities rather than only reading about it in the book.
This
approach is considered to be
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practical approach to
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a child understands life lessons. I am
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advocate of
this
approach and will discuss the merits of
this
method in
this
essay. A fundamental reason is that reading may not provide
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thorough
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understanding
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understanding
to a student which creates
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confusion in their mind .
On the other
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parents
creates
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the same scenario for them and they are been asked to perform which helps them to bring out
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creative side in them .
For Example
,
parents
in the USA
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their children to learn moral values by doing carwashes, selling and baking cookies and they donate
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money to
the
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needy people .
Moreover
, reading can be a fun activity but only for
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who enjoys
this
activity to the core.
In addition
to
this
,
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time
times
people love to enjoy physical
acenarios
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scenarios
because
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would be retained in our
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mind
nind
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minds
for a longer period of time . People love to solve puzzles and moral activities which
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them to
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develop
deveolp
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develop
their brain ,while it gives an
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adrenaline
rush to many to clear
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challenges
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challenges
and how to find a solution for
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.
Furthermore
,
parents
helps
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the children to find a good hobby which can be converted
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a great skill in
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future.
For example
, in India
parents
are making children
to
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perform one sport of their liking so that
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amount of
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endorphins
can be released and
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great skill can be developed . In conclusion , reading should be allowed to those only who
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it
thoroughlyand
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thoroughly and
thoroughly
students should
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explore
their creative side by performing some new
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activities
activites
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activities
and challenges.
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