IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #teenagers #community #work #time #benefit
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Some
people
Use synonyms
 believe that teenagers should be required to volunteer in community activities in their free
time
Use synonyms
. It helps them to improve their working experience, sympathy and benefit for the society as well. There are many non-profitable or charity organizations in the world and
also
Linking Words
 in Vietnam,
such
Linking Words
 as “Tro Ngheo Vung Cao” or “La
lanh
Correct your spelling
land
 dum la rach” which help poverty children can go to school. Some other organizations collect food and clothes for
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
poor
people
Use synonyms
. With their help, many poor
people
Use synonyms
 can have food, and warm clothes in winter and children can have
the
Correct article usage
an
show examples
 education. Those contributions to society are undeniable. To keep these kindness operations continue, those organizations
also
Linking Words
 need help from contributors who can donate money for charity or simply
work
Use synonyms
 without paying in their free
time
Use synonyms
. It is better for teenagers to improve their personal
skills
Use synonyms
 when joining unpaid community
work
Use synonyms
.
Such
Linking Words
 as collecting food and clothes, classifying them in
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
suitable
ways
Correct the article-noun agreement
way
show examples
, or teaching English to poor children, etc. The candidates need to ensure the
work
Use synonyms
 is done on
time
Use synonyms
. They need to manage the
time
Use synonyms
 to complete their homework at school and the voluntary task as well. The voluntary
work
Use synonyms
 might require them to communicate with many kinds of
people
Use synonyms
 which help them improve their interpersonal skill. Sometimes they need to solve some problems arising suddenly.
In other words
Linking Words
, the volunteers need to have good communication,
time
Use synonyms
 management and problem-solving
skills
Use synonyms
. Those
skills
Use synonyms
 will take an important part in their success in the future. In conclusion, joining in voluntary
work
Use synonyms
 not only help teenagers improve their personal
skills
Use synonyms
 but
also
Linking Words
 benefit the community as well.
Submitted by buiphuongmai on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
What to do next:
Look at other essays: