Some people think visitors to other countries should imitate local customs and behaviour. Some pople disagree, they think the host country should welcome cultural differenecs. Discuss the two views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, more people go on travelling to other countries, and it has been a discussion topic whether
visitor
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should follow the local
culture
or the
host
country
should accept the
traveler
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' traditions. In my view, both visitors, as well as
host
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the host
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country
, should respect each
culture
. There are many cases
that
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traveler
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should accept the
host
country
's
culture
.
For instance
, in
Singapore
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it is against a law to bring a Durian which is a smelly fruit into the train. If tourists do not follow
this
custom, the entire train will smell so bad and the tourist will be taken to the police.
Moreover
, in the case of Japan, it is a custom to take off shoes before entering a house. If people do not follow
this
custom, the owner of the house may be upset, especially those who live in
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countryside because most
of
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the
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cases they are not exposed to other overseas cultures. Meanwhile, in my view, the
host
country
should widely accept
the
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cultural difference in case it is associated with religion.
For instance
, when Muslim people travel abroad, they still have foods they cannot accept and
also
a certain schedule to play. These are the customs that should not be changed due to one's travel.
Further
, food choices
such
as vegetarianism should
also
be accepted greatly.
For instance
, it is not common yet to have vegetarian choices in the restaurant,
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however
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to welcome more tourists, it is important to increase
such
restaurants that adopt multiple food options. Overall, I believe that there are cases in the
host
country
and tourists should accept each
culture
. By welcoming each
culture
, the cultural exchange can be accelerated.
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