Some people think visitors to other countries should imitate local customs and behaviour. Some pople disagree, they think the host country should welcome cultural differenecs. Discuss the two views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, more people go on travelling to other countries, and it has been a discussion topic whether

visitor

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visitors

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should follow the local

culture

or the

host

country

should accept the

traveler

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' traditions. In my view, both visitors, as well as

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the host

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country

, should respect each

culture

. There are many cases

that

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traveler

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travelers

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should accept the

host

country

culture

For instance

, in

Singapore

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it is against a law to bring a Durian which is a smelly fruit into the train. If tourists do not follow

this

custom, the entire train will smell so bad and the tourist will be taken to the police.

Moreover

, in the case of Japan, it is a custom to take off shoes before entering a house. If people do not follow

this

custom, the owner of the house may be upset, especially those who live in

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countryside because most

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cases they are not exposed to other overseas cultures. Meanwhile, in my view, the

host

country

should widely accept

the

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cultural difference in case it is associated with religion.

For instance

, when Muslim people travel abroad, they still have foods they cannot accept and

also

a certain schedule to play. These are the customs that should not be changed due to one's travel.

Further

, food choices

such

as vegetarianism should

also

be accepted greatly.

For instance

, it is not common yet to have vegetarian choices in the restaurant,

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however

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to welcome more tourists, it is important to increase

such

restaurants that adopt multiple food options. Overall, I believe that there are cases in the

host

country

and tourists should accept each

culture

. By welcoming each

culture

, the cultural exchange can be accelerated.

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In a nutshell
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Grammar mistakes
 

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5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people think visitors to other countries should imitate local customs and behaviour. Some pople disagree, they think the host country should welcome cultural differenecs. Discuss the two views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

In a number of countries, some people think that it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new rail lines for the fast trains between cities. Other believe the money should be spend on Improving existing public transport. Discuss both views.

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The development of technology has resulted in more employees working from home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

An increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. Why is this the case, and what solutions are possible?

Some people believe that to give opportunities to the new generation companies should encourage high level employees who are older than 55 to retire. Do you agree or disagree?