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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Compare and contrast both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, society's main goal is to give children high-quality education,
subsequently
, school is a frequent controversial issue. There is part of
people
, who consider that
pupils
 should be divided into different buildings due to their gender, while others believe mixed
schools
 are more beneficial. In
this
 essay, I will argue that while boys and girls may feel more comfortable in separate
schools
,
such
 modified versions of the education system would not help
pupils
' development and character. To start with,
pupils
 can feel much more comfortable in separate classes, since there is a wide range of talking themes
people
 don't enjoy sharing with the opposite sex. It is natural, research which was concluded in 30
schools
 in America, indicates that 90% of school students have friendships with the same gender
people
.
Moreover
, females can represent a distraction from studying for males, same can be said for girls, girlfriend and boyfriend relationship is always complicated between classmates and usually cause conflicts.
On the other hand
, separate classes would not increase the productivity of the children, because a wide range of opinions and thoughts are incitive to make one think critically. Boys and girls may have differences in the way they think but it can not have a bad impact on their development.
Furthermore
, communication between them is vital for their coming life,
otherwise
, as independent
people
 ,they will face difficulties in building healthy relationships with the opposite gender.
For example
: all men should know how to treat women appropriately and respectfully. In conclusion, while separate
schools
 can be favourable, they would cause more problems in
pupils
' character and development rather than solve them.
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