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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
Choosing
work place
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 is one of the most important problems that many
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doctors
docters
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doctors
 and engineers face.
However
, whether or not stay and
work
 in their own nation is a controversial issue. In my opinion,
people
 have
right
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 to choose their
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work place
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. Some
people
 believe that the
country
 has spent lots of money on
people
 who become doctors or
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engineers
enginners
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engineers
, if they do not
work
 in the
country
, the money and
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resources
resoures
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resources
 will be wasted. That means the
people
 who get training from their
country
, should
to
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work
 in their hometown. Because the development of
country
need
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 excellent person,especially
talants
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talents
 and experts.
Therefore
 they should stay and as repay
for
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their nations.
However
, others, believe that all
the
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people
 can choose their
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work place
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 freely due to the world is more and more like a village. Wherever they
work
, they all take service for all the world.
For example
, ENISTAN was born in German, he
also
 learned
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knowledge
knowladge
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knowledge
 in German, but at
last
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 he worked in
U.S.A
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the U.S.A
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. It is no disadvantage for him. Thereby working in any
country
 will have
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nothing
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noting
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nothing
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 to
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affect
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effect
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affect
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 all the
people
’s life. I think science and experts are
driving
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force
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forces
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 behind developed countries.
People
 who
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thought
through
throught
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through
 their hard study and become
like
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doctor
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doctors
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 or engineers can make their own decision freely.
One
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 side for themselves, they can get more benefits from their jobs.
The
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 other side they can pay back to
all the
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society.
For instance
, every year, there are lots of engineers
go
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who go
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 to Africa to help local
people
 improve
water
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 system,
all
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and all
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 the sciences
are
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learn their knowledge from other countries. In
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conclusion
conclousion
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conclusion
, choosing
workplace
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a workplace
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 is a right for everyone, it is
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an advantage
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advantage
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advantages
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overwigh
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overweight
overweigh
 than
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a disadvantage
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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