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Nowadays the crime rate among young people is increasing. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done by parents and teachers to reduce it?

#crime #rate #people #parents #teachers
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modern
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Period
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,
crime
 is raised among the
youth
. how can
parents
 and instructors help to reduce among society
.
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In
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this
 should outline issues and give resolutions to reduce
crime
.
To begin
 with,
crime
 is increasing among younger people.
firstly
, lack of
awareness
 among the
youth
 about laws and
regulations
.
In other words
, young people do not knowledge about their
law
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laws
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 and
regulations
.
For instance
, half of the
youth
, do not know about punishment through
law
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laws
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 and
regulations
.To sort it out, Government should arrange free programs to give
awareness
 about the laws and
regulations
 of their country.,
also
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 provide
a knowledge programs
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knowledge programs
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 in secondary schools to give
awareness
 about our
law
.
Furthermore
, I would like to highlight the major impact of the
crime
 rate increasing day by day.
secondly
,
parents
 provide them with all the
facilities
 and luxuries
an
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 early age
it
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 cause
crime
 is raised among their
youth
.
In other words
, some
parents
 give cars and weapons to children to flex in front of their friends.
For example
, My cousin lives in Canada, so his
parents
 provide them with all the luxuries in his, but he is doing misuse and breaking all the
law
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laws
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 of their country. recently he just killed one man on the road with a weapon.To figure it
,
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out, parents
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parents
 should not provide all the
facilities
 to their children in their teenage age because it
cause
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 harm to society.
Lastly
, the
crime
 rate frequently increases among teenagers. it is caused because of several reasons
such
 as Lack of
awareness
 and providing more
facilities
 to children. ,
also
 give some
suggestion
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suggestions
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 that Government arrange the program to give
awareness
 about
law
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the law
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 and
parents
 should not provide all the
facilities
 to their kids.
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