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Nowadays many people choose to be self empoyed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.Why might this be the case?What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

#people #self #work #company #organisation #be #case
Employment is one of the most
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important
improtant
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important
 problems that many
people
 face.
However
, whether or not
people
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to
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be self-
empoyed
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employed
 is a controversial issue. In my opinion,
although
 there are some advantages in
work
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themselves
themseves
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themselves
,
but
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we cannot ignore more disadvantages. It is obvious that self-employed can help
government
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the government
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 to resolve
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unemployment
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the unemployement
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unemployement
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unemployment
 problem.
Firstly
, with advanced technology, more and more
people
 choose
work
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 for themselves.
Therefore
, the government can focus on other
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aspects
expect
espect
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aspects
,
such
 as
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education
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education
; public health and public traffic, etc.
Secondly
,
people
choose
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 to be self-employed can
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control
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control
 their
time
, they do not need to meet rush hour
everyday
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 and they can choose their
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flexible
flexable
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flexible
time
 to finish their job.
Thirdly
,
people
 can make their decision freely,
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which
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 means they
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have a chance
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have chance
 to choose what kind of
business
 they will start.
For example
,
people
 who learned
business
 management
program
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programs
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, they can choose to establish a shop.
people
 who learned
machinning
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machining
 technology,
they
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apply
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can
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create
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creat
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create
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 a factory, and
people
 who learned computer science,
they
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can open a shop online like Amazon.
Therefore
,
work
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 for themselves has
lot
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a lot
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 of benefits. Meanwhile, I believe
to be
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being
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 self-employed
have
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has
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 more downsides.
Firstly
, many
people
 who want to open their own
business
has
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have
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no
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not
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 enough money. They can only borrow money from their friends and families. That will give them
lots
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 of pressure.
Secondly
, if the
first
business
 was failed,
they
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it
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 will lose
their
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its
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 ambitions for a long
time
.
For example
, some
people
 dare to join any party because
his
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or
her
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their
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first
 shop was
breakdown
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a breakdown
the breakdown
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.
Thirdly
, with strong pressure, they cannot take
time
 to have a rest, they have to
work
 all the
days
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day
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,
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 so that it is very harmful
for
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to
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 their health. In conclusion,
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although
althouth
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although
to be
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being
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 self-employed have some benefits,
but
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apply
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I think
if
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people
 who
haven’t
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do haven’t
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 some resources and enough money, they need to think about it very carefully. The
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disadvantages
disadvantges
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disadvantages
are
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outweigh
outweith
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outweigh
outwith
 the advantages.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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