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Nuclear energy is a better than other sources of energy for meeting the ever increasing global energy need. To what extent to you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In recent years, there has been a significant increase in the need for
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.
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 derived from nuclear reactions is considered to be better than other available
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 sources. I do not agree with
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 statement because
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 is costly ,and there is a lot of toxic
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 generated from it. Procuring
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 from nuclear reactions is a tedious and expensive task.
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, governmental bodies need to set up nuclear
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 stations,
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 requires a huge amount of monetary investment.
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, these
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 generators occupy a lot of space which might require mass deforestation,
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 adding to the expenses.
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, generating
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 from nuclear emissions and atomic collisions has many financial drawbacks, which can have a negative effect on the economy.
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 nuclear
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 is an efficient source of
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, it is known to produce tonnes of dangerous
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.
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 can have detrimental effects on the health of people, because of its radiotoxic and cytotoxic nature.
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, the world has not discovered ways of discarding these lethal substances,
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 they are conveniently dumped in water bodies.
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 can result in cancers and developmental disorders in children , who consume
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 polluted water. There are alternative
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 sources, which are cheaper, safer and produce minimum
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. These include
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 from solar panels and hydraulic stations. In conclusion, nuclear
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 has several economic downsides
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and produces a lot of radioactive
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 which is difficult to get rid of.
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, I believe that it is not the best resource, which can be used to satisfy the
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 requirements of the world. There are other cost-effective and safer choices available.
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