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Social networking websites like facebook causes a mass of negative exposure by assuming of myriad people. It is agreed that the growth of network consuming leads to considerable matters in society, spheres. Firstly, this essay will discuss the rise of health issues rise and secondly it will analyse why communicating skills by social network usage shows low level.

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Nowadays increasing
health
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 issues number is due to
overexcessive
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over-excessive
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cover excessive
 watching
social
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the social
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 web.
Sedentary
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A sedentary
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 lifestyle became
an
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 habit where people's immune
system
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systems
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 gradually
deteriorating
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deteriorate
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 without physical
exercises
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exercise
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.
Time consuming
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 but
also
 the
first
 networking for quality) layers
takes
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 not only
off hours
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off-hours
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 quality
our
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of our
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 vision! by corrupting the
first
 layers of your eye socket.
As
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an
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apply
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instance,
headache
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headaches
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, psychical anxiety,
addiction
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and addiction
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 directly through social media channels.
This
 is one of
underlying
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the underlying
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 factors to use social
one
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apply
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media less.
Furthermore
, socializing skills
also
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are also
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 worse by utilization of online networks. Owing to text messages people don't need long sophisticated sentences,
thus
 shortened versions of words
causing
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cause
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 grammatical issues
between
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among
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 teenagers.
Moreover
,
shortage
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the shortage
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 of
face to face
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face-to-face
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 conservations leads to making
person
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a person
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 distancing
himself
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themselves
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by stepping back from reality.
At
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During
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 the period of
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 we could see that
to
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some people
also
ourselves
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apply
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started to feel severely isolated from
surrounding
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their surrounding
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 and
this
due
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was due
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 to
lack
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a lack
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 of live chat. In conclusion, social environment drawbacks are more substantial comparably to pros, so overusing of network turns
to
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in
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 immune problems and fading of hardwired speaking abilities
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