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Some people believe that a greater difference in age between parents and children is more beneficial than less of a difference. Do you think the advantages of a greater age difference outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is often thought that
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age
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gap
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 between
children
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 and
parents
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 plays an advantageous role
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 the development of numerous social
skills
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of
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 their babies.
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 the contrasting views are
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 shared by other people. According to my opinion, I think that
such
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gap
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 can bring about more benefits compared to any demerits it might bring. Despite the drawbacks below, I believe that the more
gap
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 in
age
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, the more positive aspects it brings both for the
children
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 and their
parents
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.
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, couples can enjoy their conjugal lives quite longer by watching late-night dramas or going for a long drive more frequently compared to those who just got married and gave birth to a boy or girl within
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 months of their marriage.
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,
husband
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husbands
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 and wives can become more financially stable and take wise decisions regarding the birth
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 social
skills
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 development of a child if they wait a bit longer to become
parents
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.
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, according to
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apply
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statistics reported in a newspaper
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 a European country, it can be noticed that
children
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 whose
parents
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 are substantially older than them develop various interpersonal
skills
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 like communicating with their
neighbors
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neighbours
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 in crisis
situation
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situations
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 pretty
faster
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much faster
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 than those whose
parents
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 are comparatively young. Admittedly, there are some issues
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 involved when the
age
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gap
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 between
parents
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 and their
children
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are
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 fairly high. The term “generation
gap
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” is well-known to all which explains why
children
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 can’t get proper help regarding the use of
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 technology like smartphones, tablets, video games or even browsing
internet
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 from their
parents
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 if they are too old. Another negative aspect is that
children
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 often feel shy to ask for
pocket-money
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pocket money
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 from their older
parents
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 as they are unable to grow a friendly relationship with them predominantly due to
difference
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differences
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 in
age
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. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion regarding the positive or negative aspects of greater
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 difference
within
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between
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parents
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 and their
children
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, I strongly believe that crucial benefits like maximum enjoyment of conjugal life or faster social
skills
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 development of
children
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 of substantially adult
parents
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 far outweigh any of the minor disadvantages.
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