Some young people like to copy the behaviour and clothes of famous people today. Why might this be the case? What problems can it cause?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Nowadays,some young
people
Use synonyms
enjoy mimicking
celebrities
Change noun form
celebrities'
celebrity's
show examples
or
influencers
Change noun form
influencers'
influencer's
show examples
outfits and their behaviour.In
this
Linking Words
essay, I will discuss possible reasons
also
Linking Words
the outcome issues for it. Teenage time is
such
Linking Words
a fragile period. Some are still looking for their own identity and have
unstable
Add an article
the unstable
show examples
mentality
Fix the agreement mistake
mentalities
show examples
. Those are easily
infruenced
Correct your spelling
influenced
by other
people
Use synonyms
's
opinion
Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
show examples
and have
fear
Correct article usage
a fear
show examples
to
Change preposition
of
show examples
not
get
Wrong verb form
getting
show examples
involved
Change preposition
in friend's
show examples
friend's
Fix the agreement mistake
friends'
show examples
circle.In their small society following celebrities
life style
Correct your spelling
lifestyle
show examples
or
fashons
Correct your spelling
fashions
fashion
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
the
keys
Fix the agreement mistake
key
show examples
to
make
Wrong verb form
making
show examples
friends or being popular among them. Unfortunately,
such
Linking Words
things cause issues sometimes.
first
Linking Words
of all, they start to have
financial
Add an article
a financial
show examples
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
show examples
due to buying
Correct your spelling
unnecessary
Correct article usage
an unnecessery
show examples
unnecessery
Correct your spelling
unnecessary
amount
Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
show examples
of clothes,shoes and bags to
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
look like their
favorite
Change the spelling
favourite
show examples
people
Use synonyms
.
secondly
Linking Words
, they could have health
issue
Fix the agreement mistake
issues
show examples
due to
smoke
Replace the word
smoking
show examples
cigarette
Fix the agreement mistake
cigarettes
show examples
or using drugs by following famous
people
Use synonyms
's
behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
show examples
. In conclusion, young
people
Use synonyms
are still
Correct your spelling
searching
serching
Correct your spelling
searching
for their own style and tend to make mistakes
thus
Linking Words
they need support from
society
Add an article
the society
show examples
also
Linking Words
adult
people
Use synonyms
need to observe them carefully.
Submitted by nagare_me on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • role models
  • aspire
  • influenced by
  • lifestyle
  • fashion choices
  • social media
  • visibility
  • accessible
  • desirable
  • followers
  • endorsements
  • marketing campaigns
  • trendsetters
  • peer pressure
  • conformity
  • emulate
  • experiment
  • identity
  • express themselves
  • admire
What to do next:
Look at other essays: