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Nowadays more tasks at home and work are being performed by robots. Is this a negative or positive development?

#tasks #home #work #robots #development
Robots
 are one of the remarkably visible evidence of
improvement
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of
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 information and technology in today's
world
.
Robots
 are being used to get things done faster for
both
 home chores and office work. While everything has
both
 good and bad when considering
it's
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 impact on personal lives, I strongly agree that
robots
 affect positively. In
this
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 I am elaborating more on how
robots
 and new technology are helping humans to make things easier. In
modern
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world
,
robots
 are used in many house equipment. One of the most popular house
robot
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 is the
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vacuum
vaccume
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vacuum
 cleaning bot which is selling itself with its
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grate
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 features and affordability, all around the
world
. Since
both
 husband and wife are working in modern society, they have very limited time for themselves to spend quality time, resulting
them
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to consume
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 more and more technologically tuned
equipments
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 to give them a hand.
Also
 in offices
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nowadays
nowerdays
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nowadays
, highly developed
robots
 are used in
productionlines
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production lines
. A very good example
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this
 is the
robots
 that are being used by the BMW car company on their automobile production line to boost the quality and speed of their products at the same time. Getting developed a personalized robotic system by a
multibillion
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 companies is not a new habit, but a greater investment
that is
 done by the company in order to improve and maintain their production efficiency and quality. In conclusion,
robots
 are one of
the
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fascinating creations of humans that involve in
both
 personal and professional
level
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levels
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 of
individuals
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 lives that could not be separated anymore in
this
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fast
 moving
world
. My two cents are
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 the argument that,
robots
 and technology are definitely affecting positively in
modern
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 era by empowering
human
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humans
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 to explore more while
robots
 do all the boring jobs for us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Artificial intelligence (AI)
  • Humanoid
  • Machine learning
  • Task allocation
  • Operational costs
  • Manual labor
  • Disruptive technology
  • Ergonomics
  • Unemployment
  • Cybersecurity
  • Technological singularity
  • Redundant workforce
  • Innovation
  • Ethical considerations
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