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Unemployment remains the biggest challenge for school leavers. To what extent do you agree? What other challenges do young people face today?

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Straight after finishing
school
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 can be a really complex chapter in your
life
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 because from now on you have to decide what you are going to do with your
life
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 and how you will earn income. Young people face a lot of challenges, but in my opinion, the biggest one is unemployment. When students leave
school
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, they need a financial source, because they have to take care of themselves. Joblessness is one of the most feared positions in
life
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 and no one wants to be in that situation, especially nowadays when everything is really expensive. If a person is unemployed, his economic prospects can be undermined and he is not capable of buying the items he needs. Another problem is the social mobility restriction. If a person does not earn income, he is locked to a certain place and
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does not have funds to go or move elsewhere. Unemployment is not the only challenge young people have to face. After finishing
school
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 they usually have to go and live on their own, which can be a really complicated thing for many of them, because they are not used to doing everything on their own. Another challenge is an existential crisis because from their childhood there was
school
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 and they knew that it is their duty and they have to go to
school
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, but when it ends, they just do not know what to do with their future. To sum it all up, unemployment is the biggest challenge young people face today, but alongside there are other challenges
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 as living on your own and figuring out what to do with your
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