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The bar graph provides information on the number of passengers visiting the top three Airports of New York City namely John F. Kennedy, LaGuardia, and Newark. Overall, it can be noted that among the three Airports, only John F. Kennedy had a fluctuating trend whereas the other two
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 an upward pattern.
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, LaGuardia
airport
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 has the most
numbers
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number
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 of visitors which reach its all-time high in the
year
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 2000 and an all-time low was noted
on
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at
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 Newark
airport
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 in
the
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apply
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year
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 1995. In detail, it can be observed that Laguardia
Airport
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initially
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 had 35 million
passenger’s
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passengers
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 way back
1995
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in 1995
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,
this
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 was
further
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 increased to approximately doubled the number of passengers in the
year
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 2000 with a total of around 69,000 tourists.
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, it can be noted that Newark
Airport
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 increases its visitors from 15 million to 38 million from 1995 to 1997. But remained unchanged from 1998 to the end of
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year
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the year
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 2000.
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, it reached
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a 50
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% increment from the initial record.
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