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Some people think that parents should teach their children about the importance of recycling. Others believe recycling should be taught in schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #parents #children #importance #schools
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Recycling is considered
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one of the key
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 against the pressing issue of environmental pollution. There is a wide belief among people that
children
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 should learn about
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 solution from their
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 and an equal majority
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 they should learn it from school. I believe that the young generation should be educated about the need for recycling starting from both home and school to better handle the crisis
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 grappling our world at an alarming rate.
Parents
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 are the
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 and foremost teachers of any child. It is from home, where
children
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 always learn the core values.
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, families play a vital role in shaping the foundation of a child’s mental upbringing, and
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 will have an edge in instilling the habit of recycling in their
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,
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 can be rewarded for conscious choices they make towards recycling initiatives, which helps them to come up with a routine for life. On the
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other hand
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, educational institutions should include the subject
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 reducing environmental footprint as part of the curriculum where
children
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 are taught about the importance of
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 issue and various methods to keep a check on the problem. Students can be given opportunities to take part in projects or activities that
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 them understand the issue at hand.
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, creating awareness among the educational community brings many innovative approaches and solutions to the most common challenges around recycling. To summarize, recycling or reusing is an undeniable solution towards the problems faced by environmental pollution and climate change and it should be addressed among the newer generation through schools and
parents
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 as it can adversely affect their lives in future.
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