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Many developed countries now have large numbers of people over the age of 65. What problems might this cause? How can the problems be solved?

#countries #numbers #people #age
Human
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resourses
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 very important to any country, and keeping
balance
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a balance
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 between different ages and
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 male and female ratio ensures economical stability and strength. To figure out the solution we need to start looking for the cause, more families are now decreasing the number of children as they were
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 before 20 years, even some couples
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 to have children,
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 led to disturbance in the young and old ratio. The main problem these countries are facing is that
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people
 are working
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,
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people
 are paying taxes which makes older
people
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burden
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 to
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society while the decrease in young ages is the real problem. To solve
this
 problem, the
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governments
government
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governments
 should take the responsibility
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legislate
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 new laws that
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people
 to have more children, but we can consider
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 a far future solution, while some countries tried to make a quick solution by bringing young immigrants that are able to work and increase the young population.
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 I think that government should always be responsible for the planning and
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law making
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 to keep percentages in balance.
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