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In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

Around the world, the increasing volume of
traffic
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 at an alarming rate is a big concern. There are many causes due to which the
traffic
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 on
roads
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 is increasing every day while a number of actions can be taken with immediate effects to mitigate the huge
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.
This
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To begin
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 with, the main cause of huge
traffic
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 is overpopulation in the major
cities
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 and towns.
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 to that, the lack of better road infrastructures, lenient rules and regulations to monitor the
traffic
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 and less use of public transport has led to
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traffic
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 ,especially during peak hours.
For instance
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, Bangalore, a city in India is not only known as the IT hub of India but
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 known for the busiest
traffic
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 among the popular
cities
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 across the globe. The situation has become bad to worse in the span of a few years.
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, the number of private vehicles on
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 has doubled over the period of five years causing air pollution which is impacting an individual physically and mentally.
On the other hand
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, Government should immediately take
necessary
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 actions to reduce
traffic
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. Widening the
roads
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, creating separate lanes for
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two-wheelers
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two- wheelers
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two-wheelers
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 and four-wheelers, better facilities and affordable public transport could be the best options for any
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cities
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city
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 or
towns
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town
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 facing huge
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 problems. Metro facilities and world-class buses should be introduced on
roads
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 for the public. Government should implement strict laws
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 as mandatory use of public transport once a week by an individual to curb the
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 problems to some extent. To conclude, Government should take immediate action to reduce the
traffic
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 problems in
cities
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otherwise
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, it will increase issues
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 as air pollution, damage to
roads
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 and the productivity of an individual day by day.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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