International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local  inhabitants ant the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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The international
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travel has brought indispensable benefits to many towns and cities across the globe. The benefit outcome of the aforementioned concept is globalization and
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in employment opportunities.
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, the
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of the concept is
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threat to
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nature. On the
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hand , there are myriad advantages
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international
tourism
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industries
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growth. The
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and
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foremost benefit is improvement in globalization,
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economic, social, political and cultural spheres of the modern world get high which helps to increase
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.
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, major revenue is generated through
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tourism
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the tourism
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sector which
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in employment recruitment ,
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limit unemployment stopped. For an instance,
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the
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survey by GNLU says that 45 % of vacancies had been generated through
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tourism
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the tourism
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field in India.
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,
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field has
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as compared to past years.
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,
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of
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concept is
severe
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threat to
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nature through various
medium
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mediums
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. Due to the rise in
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tourism
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sector, infrastructure develops which badly cause the environment.
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, to build premium resorts and infrastructure ample
of
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trees are cut down,
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deforestation occurs.Which affect the local civilian as well as the environment . To quote an example 190 trees had been cut down in
kerala
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to build a tourist resort.
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, many other towns and cities are doing the same activities.
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that soil erosion take place, rise in pollution and
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many more
manymore
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many more
acts take place To conclude, global
tourism
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has brought tremendous benefits to many towns and cities across the world.
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there
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major
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setback
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in concern .
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, the advantages of
tourism
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industries outweigh the disadvantage.
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